1 files changed, 21 insertions, 17 deletions

diff --git a/draft-schanzen-gns.xml b/draft-schanzen-gns.xml
index a90c318..01b0a05 100644
--- a/draft-schanzen-gns.xml
+++ b/draft-schanzen-gns.xml
@@ -37,13 +37,13 @@
 <?rfc sortrefs="yes" ?>
 <?rfc compact="yes" ?>
 <?rfc subcompact="no" ?>
-<rfc xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude" category="info" docName="draft-schanzen-gns-20" ipr="trust200902" obsoletes="" updates="" submissionType="IETF" xml:lang="en" version="3">
+<rfc xmlns:xi="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude" category="info" docName="draft-schanzen-gns-21" ipr="trust200902" obsoletes="" updates="" submissionType="IETF" xml:lang="en" version="3">
  <!-- xml2rfc v2v3 conversion 2.26.0 -->
  <front>
   <title abbrev="The GNU Name System">
    The GNU Name System
   </title>
-  <seriesInfo name="Internet-Draft" value="draft-schanzen-gns-20"/>
+  <seriesInfo name="Internet-Draft" value="draft-schanzen-gns-21"/>
   <author fullname="Martin Schanzenbach" initials="M." surname="Schanzenbach">
    <organization>Fraunhofer AISEC</organization>
    <address>
@@ -2749,16 +2749,20 @@ NICK: john (Supplemental)
            "Single Hierarchy with a Centrally Controlled Root" and
            "Distribution and Management of Root Servers" as raised in
            <xref target="RFC8324"/>.
-           In the Domain Name System root zone governance is centralized at the
-           Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN).
-           GNS can be used to leverage the transitivity in the SDSI design to
-           replace the trusted root with secure delegation of authority thus
-           making petnames useful to other users while operating under a very
-           strong adversary model.
-           By building on the ideas from SDSI, GNS allows to address a central
-           issue with the decentralized mapping of secure identifiers to memorable
-           names: namely the impossiblity of providing a global, secure and
-           memorable mapping without a trusted authority.
+           In DNS, those issues are a direct result from the centralized root
+           zone governance at the Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and
+           Numbers (ICANN) which allows it to provide globally unique names.
+         </t>
+         <t>
+           In GNS, start zones give users local authority over their preferred
+           root zone governance.
+           It enables users to replace or enhance a trusted root zone
+           configuration provided by a third party (e.g. the implementer or a
+           multi-stakeholder governance body like ICANN) with secure delegation of
+           authority using local petnames while operating under a
+           very strong adversary model.
+           In combination with zTLDs, this provides users of GNS with a global,
+           secure and memorable mapping without a trusted authority.
          </t>
          <t>
            Any GNS implementation <bcp14>MAY</bcp14> provide a default
@@ -2771,15 +2775,15 @@ NICK: john (Supplemental)
            Technically, the GNS protocol can be used to resolve names in the
            namespace of the global DNS.
            However, this would require the respective governance bodies and
-           stakeholders to standardize the use of GNS for this particular use
-           case and publish their zones accordingly.
+           stakeholders (e.g. IETF and ICANN) to standardize the use of GNS for this particular use
+           case.
          </t>
          <t>
-           However, this capability  means that by definition GNS names may be
+           However, this capability implies that GNS names may be
            indistinguishable from DNS names in their
            respective common display format <xref target="RFC8499"/> or
-           other special-use domain names <xref target="RFC6761"/> given
-           a local GNS start zone configuration that maps suffixes from the
+           other special-use domain names <xref target="RFC6761"/> if
+           a local start zone configuration maps suffixes from the
            global DNS to GNS zones.
            For applications, it is then ambiguous which name system should be
            used in order to resolve a given name.